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[H.Bitch]

Critics pleaseee

[Rosie]

Ok, I assume the track acctualy starts around the 10 second mark and all prior is your lead in. that being said I am not a huge fan on the 2nd and 3rd loops being very near the same. I love the intro build up and drop to the piano, but at the same time it almost kills the song. Lovee the song from there on out, but it would appeal to kids eating smacky pills and K hole kids. It is slow and is hard to get into. In all pretty good, great blending with the exception of the one at 33 seconds. I would really like to see more out of the 33-55 second loop and I think it would sure up the track alot.

[ZERO]

Personally I do not like commenting on development music unless I can get a lossless RAW to ensure that I am hearing exactly what is intended.

I think the doubled intro needs to be cut in half. The 33sec mark should be the end of that section. Then a new 33sec section needs to be added to the end to bring more conclusion to the work. I do not feel that this work has any end, the music just stops playing. I hear an intro and a development but no conclusion.

So please try to create a great conclusion to this work so we can give it another listen. (Also link us a raw).


On another note I just want to point out for reference that this quote is invalid: "it almost kills the song. Lovee the song". The word song can not be used as this is not a song, a song being a piece of homophonic music containing vocals with accompaniment. Also you could remember it the easy way of it is not a song if there is no singing although this can be misleading as it is possible to have a piece of music that contains vocals ie singing but is not a song in that it may be for example monophonic or polyphonic thus not meeting the definition of a song.

[H.Bitch]

http://www.newgrounds.com/audio/listen/439868

Here's the cut I needed for the release, added my vocalist in for up to this point.

[ZERO]

Interesting, will the rest of the lyrics be added over the existing 2min track or will it take place after. Currently it seems that the existing track is leading into a longer lyrical section which would move at 1.5-2x speed before then returning to the original pace. It may be nice to try to fit two quatrains with a short buffer at normal speed between them before moving to a short final that is a repeat of the current lyrics but restated differently. This would lead to a total time between 4-5min.

Do you have a raw text of the verses so we could look them over? So far I really like the current lyrics and the theme that it builds. I understand if you are pressed for time and do not want to expand the scope of this work. However, I do believe that it could be turned into something larger if the suggestions above are followed. I am heading out of town and thus packing tomorrow so I will not be able to help much more until next week. If you wanted to make it longer in the future and need additional lyrics be sure to post and I can have some written up. I can also call a few artists and a music director to get some opinions.

Also just to clear up anything, I do not nor ever have made music, I am just an audiophile so you can take my opinions cum grano salis.

[elpolloloco]

Where are you from? Where do you spin?

[Fluffy Frufflebottoms]

I'm not an expert on the subject, but don't know if I would categorise this track as liquid funk. The wide synth (which I think is excellent, and a refreshing change from the typical junglistic elements of artists like Calibre and Logistics) is very aggressive, and drives the track in the way that a consistent bassline would normally do in liquid funk. I dislike the piano part in the first track, and I dislike the lyrical part in the second. It kills the track, and is reminiscent of queasy eurodance interludes.

The track certainly has potential. Work on the good parts, and ditch the rest.